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I am upstairs, which is new for me – sitting at my husband’s computer. I have a beautiful mountain view. It’s sunny and rainy, and I’m going to take that as a metaphor for this summer, with its ups and downs. Most recently, just in the few days, we have had “sun” and “rain.” I have had time with my best friend who lives far away, and then had to say goodbye. My children have spent time loving it up with a litter of orphan kittens that my parents are fostering, and then yesterday they were there to watch one kitten suddenly and horribly die. I’m having a hard time today seeing the rainbow after yesterday’s rain – and trying to work through this post trauma time with my children.
Yesterday reminded me of the “Fortunately/Unfortunately” summarizing poetry we do at school – learned from Sara Holbrook (@saraholbrook) at a wonderful inservice years ago. I’m going to try my hand at this for my slice today. . . With many apologies to Sara Holbrook! I believe you first write using the words Fortunately and Unfortunately… Then you revise taking out extra words. I don’t usually do a writing exercise as a Slice of Life… but it’s an experiment! Here we go!
A slice of Fortunately, Unfortunately. Monday, I wake up with plans to spend time with my old friend, running around after kids at the local park Fortunately, everybody's bikes are all loaded up in the van Unfortunately, my friend has to cancel Fortunately, now I don't need to vacuum Unfortunately, my house is a disaster Fortunately, I go work out with my friend at school Unfortunately, one elliptical workout doesn't cure her cancer Fortunately, it does give us time to chat, while our heart rates climb Unfortunately, we haven't been to the weight room for months Fortunately, we remember how to use the machines Unfortunately, the phone rings and my husband tells me that the orphan kitten Polly died Fortunately, I wasn't there to see the horrible death Unfortunately, my 3 children were, and I'm not home to help them process Fortunately, my husband is home Unfortunately, my children are in shock mode Fortunately, my friend remembers that Mr. Rogers has a book on this Unfortunately, I think it's going to take more than a book Fortunately, there are distractions and cuddles Unfortunately, I have a busy day away from home Fortunately, I get time with my amazing-but-far-away best friend Unfortunately, it will be months until I get to see her again Fortunately, I eventually get home to calm, cozy children Unfortunately, the morning starts with more traumatic crying Fortunately, there are more distractions Finally, we will start to heal, paying more attention to the sunshine, and less attention to the rain
REVISED --taking out all but the most important words. . . Monday wake up bikes loaded up in van friend cancels no need to vacuum my house is a disaster I go work out with my friend one elliptical doesn't cure her cancer it does give us time while our heart rates climb haven't been to the weight room for months we remember how the phone rings the orphan kitten Polly died I wasn't there to see the horrible death my 3 children were I'm not home my husband is my children are in shock remember Mr. Rogers' book on this I think it's going to take more than a book There are distractions and cuddles I have a busy day away from home time with amazing far away friend it will be months until I see her again I get home to calm, cozy the morning starts with more trauma crying there are more distractions We will start to heal, pay more attention to the sunshine less attention to the rain
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Thanks for sharing how you came to this writing and the two versions. I want to try this. I’m so sorry about Polly…..there are lots of books………..
Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving a kind comment. Hope you try a fortunately, unfortunately!
So sorry for your loss. There are a number of good books….I always like to use the 10 Good Things About Barney….I know that there are lots of others….RIP, Polly.
I haven’t read that one – I’m going to check it out. The kids have been a little resistant to reading/listening to books about it – but I think now that a little more time has gone by, I’m going to try again. I love the book Harry and Hopper too – it’s sad to read but powerfully healing, I think. Thanks for stopping by and commenting!
New idea for poetry next April. Thanks!
Yes! It can work for lots of content areas too! 🙂
What a wonderful way to practice perspective in our writing – I am definitely going to have to try this soon. I love the way you were able to whittle the first version down to its essence, too. And, I am sorry about Polly…it’s so hard to lose our furry friends.
Thanks, Tara. It was hard. Writing about the day really did help – perspective! Thanks for stopping by. 🙂
What a powerful way to write!
I am sorry to hear about Polly.
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